My new song, Check 1.

[pittviper]

Hey, tell me what you think, yet to record it yet, but going to make a beat similar to that of Imagine by Snoop Dogg... This isn't the polished copy, lots of work still needs to be done I know. Just check 1, of 3.
PV

Title is: Just Hold on

**Talking** **This is for anyone with their world upside down, just hold on**

Chorus:
The only thing to do is to get my world right. Build strong goals, and keep them in sight/
And ya I know it's sometimes easy to lose sight and go back to old habbits/
Especially when it seems like the things you need, you can't have it/
This film called life is a tragic, most times unfair/
and the place where i'm living, most people won't go there/
They say it's where the worse are born, I say it's where the strong reside, because you've gotta be strong to survive/
I know it gets rocky out theerrre. They can't stop you from heeere/
So just keep on holding onnn . When your worlds cold, just hold onnn./

Verse 1:
My worlds upside down, i'm twisted around/
I thought I had a good grip, but i'm slipping right now/
You gotta understand, this life is like holding the hand of a blind man/
Not knowing where to go, not sho' if I even chose the right road/
As I look back I wonder, how I even made it past the summer, so many people in the slumber/
Never to awake again, and I can't stop my eyes from leaking/
Cuz' their gone, and I can't help it, to feel helpless/
So I pray that my seeds don't live to see the things i've seen, or do the things i've done/
Mom, please forgive your son/
For all the times you cried, for all the times I lied, I know it hurt your pride/
I'm not a bad man, was just dealt a bad hand, man/
And i'm all in. I'd be damned if I fold, never been known to ever be a quitter/
No matter the stakes, i'm in it for the long race, until the day that I get replaced, until the day that I get replaced/

Chorus:
The only thing to do is to get my world right. Build strong goals, and keep them in sight/
And ya I know it's sometimes easy to lose sight and go back to old habbits/
Especially when it seems like the things you need, you can't have it/
This film called life is a tragic, most times unfair/
and the place where i'm living, most people won't go there/
They say it's where the worse are born, I say it's where the strong reside, because you've gotta be strong to survive/
I know it gets rocky out theerrre. They can't stop you from heeere/
So just keep on holding onnn . When your worlds cold, just hold onnn./

Verse 2:
I know it feels like your crumbling inside, when the presure is high, but hold on/
Keep going for the ride, even though theres no road ahead/
They didn't pay my ways, so I made mistakes along the way, and I have to say/
I probably won't learn by tommorow, but I keep getting up, after the fall/
I guess i'm persistent if that's what it's called, and i'm known to not listen/
That's a part of my faults, but i'm trying to work on them all/
Excuse me yall, *Talking* **This is for everyone struggling out there. **/

Chorus:
The only thing to do is to get my world right. Build strong goals, and keep them in sight/
And ya I know it's sometimes easy to lose sight and go back to old habbits/
Especially when it seems like the things you need, you can't have it/
This film called life is a tragic, most times unfair/
and the place where i'm living, most people won't go there/
They say it's where the worse are born, I say it's where the strong reside, because you've gotta be strong to survive/
I know it gets rocky out theerrre. They can't stop you from heeere/
So just keep on holding onnn . When your worlds cold, just hold onnn./

I know it gets rocky out theerrre. They can't stop you from heeere/
So just keep on holding onnn . When your worlds cold, just hold onnn./

[JDSilk]

SHOW not tell..

Come on, i cant visualize any of this. Besides, how much of this is actually inspired off your true life.

other than that, its alright.

[pittviper]

Originally Posted by JDSilk

SHOW not tell..

Come on, i cant visualize any of this. Besides, how much of this is actually inspired off your true life.

other than that, its alright.

most of it is real life man.. My girlfriend broke up with me on Friday, who I had been with for a long time. She caught me making out with another girl at a friends party.. I was drunk and not thinking.. which got me writing this.

Thanks JD. Any suggestions to improve it?
PV

[dollarbills]

song can't be patterned after snoop unless your rappin' about gin/weed/bitches

[dollarbills]

meant to just say it sucks

[pittviper]

Just read the whole song, but think of my girlfriend. When I talked about people dying, and when I talk about my mom.. it all is a different meaning of the love between my girl and I that is now broken..

[pittviper]

Originally Posted by dollarbills

meant to just say it sucks

lol.. have you heard his song Imagine?

Not like his other songs dude, it's from the heart.
PV

[dollarbills]

just fukin' w/you man


i don't wanna hear a snoop dog song that's from the heart..........his first cd was nice

[JDSilk]

Originally Posted by pittviper

most of it is real life man.. My girlfriend broke up with me on Friday, who I had been with for a long time. She caught me making out with another girl at a friends party.. I was drunk and not thinking.. which got me writing this.

Thanks JD. Any suggestions to improve it?
PV

i was just giving ya a rough time... its hard to really read song lyrics and tell if its good or not, you definitely gotta sing it to something.

[StatQuo17]

reading it it sounds gay, record it n post it cuz its hard for sumone to say its good without a good beat or w.e

[Big Pimpin]

[Mr. Black]

Originally Posted by pittviper

most of it is real life man.. My girlfriend broke up with me on Friday, who I had been with for a long time. She caught me making out with another girl at a friends party.. I was drunk and not thinking.. which got me writing this.

Thanks JD. Any suggestions to improve it?
PV

Now that she broke up with you will you tell us if you banged the girl at the party?

[mrwho]

I've seen some of that lyrics somewhere and you aint go through shit if the worse thing happened was your gf dumping you from kissing another girl.

[The Judge]

Hey Pitt, maybe you and JimmyK should team up next time American Idol is holding auditions in the northeast.

[BigFratDaddy]

weird al?